SHIELD + Love like an Orange

Seeing as everyone has been posting their manga ideas in here, I though, I´d the same though my stuff is gonna be a novel. SHIELD, I'm actually already writing, only it's in Spanish. Any Spanish speaker that wants to give it a shot, just ask and I'll post the link. Here goes 'synopsis' of sort: Akin is a member of the criminal organisation Black Rose. He's been so since as far as he can remember. He´s part of a special branch call the 'child soldiers', little kids absucted at birth and trained in combat, assasination and theft. All those child soldiers, actually adore for giving them the opportunity to take revenge on the society that the let them such unfair lives as childs. Akin however, doesn't respect the Rose, he actually despises it. Not because he knows that they were actully the ones behind the assasination of his entire family, but because they robed him of his freedom to live the life he wants. The story begins with Akin having to pass his final exam te become a fully fledged member of the Black Rose. He has to infiltarte the mansion of a wealthy business man and kill one of his daughters. He accepts, though Akin´s plan is to actually use this opportunity to escape the claws of the organisation and plan his grand revenge against. As the story goes, things don´t go exactly as planned for him, and he has to adapt his new life in society, survive against incredible odds, discover the secrets of his past and the mission he was given. Feel free to give me your opinions. I'm thinking of putting in the effort, translate it and post it here.

Since I´m at it, I'm also gonna give you the idea I have for my second novel. This one I´ll start directly here. Here goes again: Sandy is student at the academy of police. She has a spectacular phisical condition, a great investigational skills, but she somehow keeps on failing her acceptance exams. This year again she fails, and while all her friends are partying she drowns her sorrows in booze all night. The following morning she wakes up, not in the bar or in her bed, but in a flaming building. She manages to escape with the help of the fire fighters but turns out to be the only survivor. Traumatised by the events, she decides to go back to her hometown, live with her 'mothers' and forget about it all. Yet, as soon as she arrives, she's approched by an inspector and her old mentor in the academy. As it turns out, she's the only witness in a serie of arsons that has been terrorising the country for months. Not only that, but her best friend, who was only also at the party and though dead, is actually being suspected by the authorities. Sandy is given deal, if she can help the the police capture the criminal, she'll be offered a post as an inspector herself.

Girl. This manga ain't no joke girl. You know what I mean? I like the ideas.

Good ideas, but in the first one, if the boy was abducted and his family slaughtered so young, then was he old enough to have a life plan/goal? The idea is indoctrination from a really young age, right? Why is he different to the rest? And would he remember the slaughter? I know it's traumatic, so it is likely, but the mind could also block out that sort of thing, or age distort it.

How he find out they kill his parents. Where the just like I kill you mom and dad so you work for me. And what happens if they fail the final exam or decide not to take it? I must know more.

. He didn't know at first. It's a part of the story, but he is told so by his superior. . His goal to defeat the organisation comes as a result of meeting someone later on. . Akin thinks of himself as very lazy. For him, it's a waste of time to hate the organisation for killing his parents when he can't do anything about it anymore and he doesn't even remember them. As I mentioned he is more angry about his loss of freedom than anything else. That changes with time, but that's also part of the story. . All the children were abducted yes, but not all of them had there parents killed. Some of them for have any parents to begin with, some were soldiers, some were slaves... by joining the organisation, they earned a way of taking there angry back on society so I'd a win-win. But that allows to most of them not all. Akin being one of the seconds.

The organization is'somewhat' lenient. You may fail, but you must not be found out and you must betray them. The black rise prides itself in the fact that it's existence is still just a myth. Those who do not accept their mission are simply dealt with. Usually it doesn't happen since most of them are working of their own free will by the time they are given the mission. Also, sorry about the mistakes and missing words. My laptop fried last week so I'm using my kindle and this thing loves to autocorrect every word I type.

Anyone could tell me which if the two (if any) you'd be interested in reading? Shield is easier for me cause it's already written and I just need to translate it, but I'm also interested in starting up LLAO. Also, Grandom, you know I'm a guy right?

I just died a little inside. Here I thought you where as preety as Beyonce. Owell :P Do they have and special powers or weapons? Or just regular assassin