Change Me Chapter one Part 1

Chapter One My name is Kenzo Miyake, I am a First Year at Ayanokoji Senior High School. I am currently sixteen years old. I have been bullied since I was in Kindergarten. I have one friend, her name is Momu Nanbe, but am not interested in pushing forward my relationship with her, even though I do have feelings for her, because I might ruin our relationship as best childhood friends. I thought today was going to be a normal day, but It was the total opposite. After school today I went to the Bookstore and while I was looking for books I found a Manga called “Change Me”. When I opened this book I saw a brilliant blue glow. I shut it immediately and went to the checkout and bought the book. After I left, I went home, but on my way home I felt vibrations coming from the book. I continued on home anyways. This is where my story begins. I go home and I go straight to my room. I sit on my computer desk and open the book, after the book was glowing for a few seconds, a funnel of blue and pink rises from the book and swirls down to the ground, then, all of the sudden a blinding flash of white light. After about ten seconds, the light dissipated. I got up out of my computer desk. Three boys and four girls, all about my age, were standing right in front of me. The four girls hair were bright pink for one, another was black, the third one was a brunette, and the last one was blonde. The guys hair colors were brown, blonde, and and one with short enough hair enough to make it look like it was gray. The tallest guy asked me what my name was, he had an unsettling aura.

This was pretty good! The only thing I can say is go into more detail, like the you did with the last few parts. It'll be interesting seeing the next chapters :)

Thats a pretty awesome story :D one thing though not trying to sound mean but what was the point of it? Like whats going on and whats the overall conflict, why are the people that showed up even relevant? Could it be that they were characters from the book and are looking for a way back or are they here to help the protagonist with his life? I would like to see you continue on plez it sounds great so far

I need to figure that out >.< Got any ideas?

You said he was bullied and had no friends maybe they could transfer in and become like his new friends or something like that :/

That is a good idea

Oh oh and they could be trying to find a way back in to their story, but in the meantime they go through life in the real world...but it has and effect on the real world and changes events so that its similar to the book